"I lost my cat. Can I go look for it?"
"Yes" she said.
I got dressed, opened my curtains and made my bed. I went past the shop, the library and the school and then I saw my cat on the soccer field. So I ran into the soccer rooms and rang the bell. Everyone froze. I got my cat and left. I asked my cat if she was ok. She said "Meow." We lived happily ever after.
By Grace
good decribing words grace
ReplyDeleteI like your sun shinny day
ReplyDeleteI think you could use a bit more deescribing words
ReplyDeleteI liked the bit, your mum said " whats wrong darling".
ReplyDeleteI liked it when you said they all froze
ReplyDeleteI think you can usre more decribing words
ReplyDeleteYour story would be much better if you used more describing words Grace.
ReplyDeletetry to use more decribing words
ReplyDeleteI liked the one siny day
ReplyDeletegrace i like your start of your sentenc because you said one sun shiney day
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